Your opening pages are where readers, agents, and editors decide whether to keep going. This package gives those pages close attention, so you can strengthen your beginning before you query or commit to a full edit. I’ll look at pacing, voice, character introductions, setting, and narrative stakes, showing you what’s working and where to focus your revision.

Who it’s for: Writers preparing to query, and writers who want feedback on their opening before investing in a full manuscript edit.

What it includes:

• Margin comments throughout on 50 double-spaced pages in 12-point font (about 12,500 words)

• Editorial letter that addresses the craft elements listed above

• One email follow-up for clarifying questions

Add a query letter review: Querying soon? I’ll read your query letter alongside your opening pages, so my feedback considers how the two work together. You’ll receive detailed comments on your hook, voice, and comp titles. You can send the letter back for a second round of notes after you’ve revised it.

What is not included: follow-up call, line editing, copyediting, or proofreading

Price: $500. Add a query letter review for $150. Payment is due in full when I receive your pages.

Turnaround time: 2-3 weeks from your scheduled start date.